Mallinger
hadn’t been content to just sit around and wait to die, as had been the case
for so many of his friends and family. There had to be an answer out there,
someone who could help. So he’d given himself a week. He had that long, he
thought; if he had no luck, he’d return home. He left without a goodbye. They’d
only have tried to stop him.
A
bar in a more built-up area of the city had called to him. He’d never seen one
before. Sitting on one of the roughly carved wooden seats, the old man had
bought him a cupful of the eye-watering brew that was distilled out back and
told him about the portal.
“Just
stand in the right spot, imagine a gleamingly white city, no disease, and
you’ll be there.”
“I
thought that place was just a fairy story,” said Mal.
He’d
given it a shot, not thinking it would work. Worst idea ever. It turned out the
likes of him weren’t welcome in Whitopolis, and now he faced dying in jail,
with no prospect of seeing his family again.
24 comments:
From the frying pan into the fire! I don't envy him.
So sad for Mal!
Beautiful snippet, as always.
Best wishes
Moon
https://aslifehappens60.wordpress.com/
Well, that didn't work. What will Mall do now?
Amble Bay's May Fair
Anyone with a name starting with "MAL" can't have a happy ending!
Affirmations for a Good Life
Cool! For me, the name 'Mal' brings up memories of the series 'Firefly'. Loved it! Happy Blogging!
http://darlamsands.blogspot.com/
ouch.
I want to hear the rest of the story...
The Multicolored Diary: WTF - Weird Things in Folktales
Sounds days, you just can't get rid of a bomb.
Look before you leap. Mal's in dire trouble now. Won't his family come looking for him? Or help in some way?
Nilanjana
Madly-in-Verse
Well, would he rather have not tried and never knew? =P
~Patricia Lynne aka Patricia Josephine~
Story Dam
Patricia Lynne, Indie Author
Oomph. Any place called "Whitopolis" cannot possibly be good.
Oh dear Nick - you've sent Mal off on a horror journey ... I hope he comes out in a healthier condition .. hope?! Cheers Hilary - have a good Easter weekend ...
http://positiveletters.blogspot.co.uk/2017/04/m-is-for-melton-mowbray-market-national.html
Popping in for a brief catch-up - glad I hit M day, Mal's such a great character :-)
Sorry for Mal.
Hope hope all will be well, Nick.
Have a great Easter weekend!
Jumping through portals always turns into adventure - even if it looks scary at first :-)
Well, bummer. I wonder how Mal will get out of it. These little snippets are intriguing indeed. :)
A to Z 2017: Magical and Medicinal Herbs
Intriguing.. Will go back to check out all your posts now!
I agree with the last comment by Ashwini Das. Have to go back now!
What a nightmare, to be stuck in such a place with no prospects of getting out. 'Whitopolis' sounds like some White Supremacist's idea of Utopia.
Goodness, that seems a bit harsh! I wonder if the barman had something against him?
Liz http://www.lizbrownleepoet.com
You're such a tease, leaving us with so many questions and concerns for Mal - though I think some of it is his own fault.
Pamela @ Highlands Days of Fun
Um, wait, what? I think you left some stuff out there.
It would seem the miracle wasn't so great after all. Wonder if he'll get out of there.
Discarded Darlings - Jean Davis, Speculative Fiction Writer, A to Z: Editing Fiction
Mal facing his mortality with a bitter twist and no hope of a miracle to save him is truly mortifying. I'm running a bit late but thanks for visiting Saturday's post, Art Sketching Through the Alphabet “M” (Mermaids). Happy a2zjing!
Wow, your writing is definitely intriguing, it makes you want to know more, which is the sign of something well done!
Josie Two Shoes
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